Shut inside
That dark dingy cell
Trying to find a way out
Unable to take the gloom anymore
Tired of living in the murk
Scared of being alone forever
Screaming in frenzy
For somebody to rescue me
And set my soul free…
Nobody appears.
Conscious of being on my own
I grope about like a blind
Feeling the bare walls
With my hands
Looking for an escape
From that cage
Desperate for freedom
And then
I find a door
My spirits rise…
I hope to see light
With shaking hands I turn the knob…
It’s locked.
I sink to the floor in anguish
Weeping…
And waiting
That dark dingy cell
Trying to find a way out
Unable to take the gloom anymore
Tired of living in the murk
Scared of being alone forever
Screaming in frenzy
For somebody to rescue me
And set my soul free…
Nobody appears.
Conscious of being on my own
I grope about like a blind
Feeling the bare walls
With my hands
Looking for an escape
From that cage
Desperate for freedom
And then
I find a door
My spirits rise…
I hope to see light
With shaking hands I turn the knob…
It’s locked.
I sink to the floor in anguish
Weeping…
And waiting
26 comments:
wow so for de first time i get de privilege of commentin at de top...wat do i say-i jus go gung ho wen i read ur posts...dis 1 was xceptional but hey y so much pain lady?watever happnd to ur sense of humor?for all of us here,put up 1 filld wid ur wit de next time...god bless!!
Back here after ages; and since then, I see u 've changed ur template. Nice poem, but your previous post had me all gooey; I was also thinking about when I was six. Those were the days, indeed! Read about ur bhaiya and bhabhi - wishing them good luck, I hope things work out for them, and the bitter reality converts to a sweet bundle! The seven and twenty -tag seems to be on at every blog! And u too John Abraham fan! Aaah, why am i not too surprised? ;-))
hmm!..about your wait...."no comments"...but somethin i'd like to "comment" on...you'll be flooded with comments for this post!!!!!
"Come, come again, whoever you are, come!
Heathen, fire worshipper or idolatrous, come!
Come even if you broke your penitence a hundred times,
Ours is the portal of hope, come as you are."
Mowlana Jalaluddin Rumi
I hav always believed that waiting is good,fruitful,
but not anymore.
nice one
trapped .... koi mirage ko bachao .. hehe i have the master key ..
well jokes apart .. very nice poem .. and hey come out of tht dark girl .... doesnt darkness scare u .. though at scary times its the best place to dwell in .... and to be free call for the warrior of light .. hehe .. guess whos it ??
nice words .. and come on u have tht power in u .... be determined .. finally u will be out on ur own .. out in the sunlight.
and my god u toook a long time for posting ....... busy kya ??
The painting is absolutely beautiful and the words that follow it seem to speak a much more than what they really mean..
arvind: my sense of humour is intact buddy! n i'll try n come up wid somethin better the next time! :)
@deepak: hey nice to see u agen! howve u been? well thnx for visiting...and dont disappear agen! :) take care
@d'yer m'aker: Sigh! u really have no idea wht i want...! Thnx neway
@rash: wow that was so apt, what u said! my feelings exactly...
@ms: thnx... :)
@anuj: My warrior of light hasgone astray i guess...he's taking forever! but i knw ultimately i'll have to claw my way out myself! :)
@gaurav: I guess youre right... thnx for stopping by.
Awwww....
Now happend to Mirage...
TripleSix is already pissed off there..and on that Mirage writing such poems...
Whats happening in Delhi??
:(
you are posting after soooooooooooo long!!
and with an amazing post like this. superb. amazing expression...
amazing post.the pain is expressed very artistically. but why the poem is so pessimistic????
just another thought...
Sigh! u really have no idea wht i want
...but why should anyone else need to have any idea...as long as you know what you want...
hey!it may tk sm time bt will b over...lol
beautifully expressed...
being alone forever ...
hmm gotta say one thing here tht one of my blogger frnds wrote:
being alone is no problem
being lonely is...
now mind you those were too heavy a lines for my poor mind to decipher...n the more i think the more it intrigues me ..difference in being alone n being lonely??is there any difference..
nyways nice post to come back
nice poem....i do hope it was all imagination...
am i allowed to intrude...
@dhruv -- >> ..
difference in being alone n being lonely??is there any difference
...i guess there is....loneliness strikes you the most....can strike you anywhere ...anytime...even when you're celebratin your salary hike party....even when you recieve a $23, 500 prize money cheque...when you're travellin in some busy train...n' even when you're alone!..whatever....for loneliness signify the void...somethin that's no more with you...somethin that tells you all the time that there's somethin missin...could be anythin....a touch...a voice....an arm..a shoulder...a smell...a-n-y-t-h-i-n-g!!....this is the time..where you really feel..that the energies are long gone...they don't find you anymore.
bein alone is totally different...it's more of the physical..actually than the content part.
p.s. i'm sorry for these unwanted remarks!
you know i just realized...apart from your tags, all of ur past few posts have been very emotive. even the hide and seek one. Not that it is a bad thing, but I hope it is just a phase. Nonetheless, I offer you a fresh daisy, and hope that in some of your next blogs,you talk abt giggles and cuddles.
Goshhh this a very beautiful poem...its like my very soul speaking. Did u write it Mirage?
Nice pic too...
Keshi.
i'm usually critical abt these kind of writing, sorry for my prejudice. everyone has presented one side of the picture let me try to potray the other side, god/fate/destiny/luck wateevr u may call it but the fact is they help only those who help themselves, if the door is closed, look harder, there might be a small window somewhere, and thou the opening maybe small and the path difficult but there will be light on the other end, remember the count of monte cristo? Edmond Dantes' kept digging with conviction, and there was light at the end of the hole.
its very easy to sit back and wait for things to happen, but if they dont how much of us make an effort for it to happen? its easy to say he was an exception, but its hard to make ur self exceptional. so my advice to the protagonist is to help himself, one loose brick, one rusted hinge is all he needs.
P.S wat fan following :o less than 2 days and already more than 20 comments
@arz000n: Change of weather, change of mood! ;)
@rohit: thnx man! will try n be more regular...
@dwaipayan: When hope ends, pessimism takes over...
@bhajji: hehe anju sharma!! ;)
@d'yer m'aker: Thts the prob, I just dont knw wht i want!!
Btw, ur right about there being a diff b/w lonliness, and being alone...i guess I'm consumed by the former...
@milo: sure...time heals everything!
@dhruv: yea man there's a huge diff, and d'yer m'aker has put it very aptly...
@varun: Part imagination, part reality...
@rash: i guess I'm being rather sullen and boring...wud try and put up somethin cheerful next time! :)
@keshi: yea hun, i wrote it... unfortunately! :)
@zxcv: I knw there is light at the end of the tunnel...bt living in the dark too long, it just begins to feel as if this is what life's gonna be...and the light seems so distant and unreachable, more like an illusion...
First time here, am captivated by your latest post. Can totally relate to it! Posted a poem about loneliness myself a couple of days back.
Love the pace of the poem and the imagery. And the picture is perfect. Speaks a thousand words.
Amazing. Will be back :). Keep on!
tell me something
How do u define the word 'FREE'?
visualize it.
do u know what u want.
I mean, every one wants to be free...
free from this...free from that
but what is this 'want of being free'
Just a thought...
i should have put this on my blog..but whatever
@princesse: Thnx so much, u have a pretty cool blog too. Am going 2 be a regular visitor there nw!
@Koi pahailee: first of all, welcome to my space.
and second, the answer to ur question. Being free means different things to different people. In this case, i'm looking for freedom from the dark world i'm supposedly living in, and freedom here means finding light. I dont knw whether I'll be bound agen when I get there...but at least I'll be 'free' from the gloom that currently surrounds me. I hope u get my point.
It was nice having u here...keep visiting. take care. :)
hmmm...
Waoh.Nice poem.I loved the ending.
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